Scene 1:
Location: Nirmal Lifestyles mall, Cafe coffee Day
Timeline : Last year of college (2007)
Characters: Two cool college kids, Two weird office goers
Why are we alone?
We are not alone. We cant be alone if we are together.
Okay ass, I meant why dont we have girlfriends?
Oh, thats because the good ones chose the dorks
Yeah.. neckless, fat, geeky dorks
Hey! We can be neckless fat and geeky, if it gets us girls that is..
Well, we are already geeky..
I am not..
Yes you are..
Yeah I am.. I know..
So all we have to become is neckless and fat..
I dont think it is fair..
Even I dont think it is fair.. but what?
They show girls swooning over Hrithik Roshan on TV, but then they go and settle for dorks like these in real life. I mean, what happened to survival of the handsomest..
Yeah I know.. My mom says I look like Hrithik.
Dont take your mom too seriously..
Oh comeon.. I do!
No, you dont.. actually you do, only hes taller and more.. whats the word.. yeah.. awesome!
You sound like a girl right now..
I know, but you can definitely pass off as Uday Chopra..
Damn you..
Pointing to two office goers sitting at a table across the cafe.
Now look at those two guys there.. We look better than they do, dont we?
We sure do.. I mean we can beat them in the looks dept any day.
Yeah, look at them. Peter England office shirts, Arrow flat trousers and office handbag.
Looks more like a purse that handbag of theirs if you ask me..
They look as if they came with a tag - since 1929
Hehe.. good one.. And look at us, cool wrist band, Levi's jeans, Reebok shirts and i-pump shoes..
Hey when did you buy them shoes?
Monday.
And you didnt tell me?
Tell you? what are we? girls?
Oh yeah.. sorry. Are those guys waiting for someone?
Yeah.. I bet they have girlfriends too.
These guys? since 1929 guys? No ways!
I bet 100..
deal..
Just then 2 pretty girls entered the cafe and walked up to them. They could hear them.
"Shall we leave boys?", said the first one.
"We ll be late for the movie", said the other one.
The guys paid the bill and started moving out, with their respective girls.
See? See? Hail me as your king! Pay up you dumbass.
Damn you ass****
He removed Rs. 100 from his wallet and thrusted it onto his friend's palm.
He said the word "Damn" loud enough for one of the guys, who was now opening the door for his girl, to hear him. He looked back at the college kids and smiled. He pulled her close to him and whispered something in her ear. She looked back at the college kids and giggled. Then the four of them left.
Scene 2:
Location: Nirmal Lifestyles mall, Cafe coffee Day
Timeline : First year of the job (2008)
Characters: Two weird college kids, Two cool office goers
Hows work?
Cool. Hows yours?
Cool.
Hows everyone at home?
What? You never used to ask that!
Really? Hmm.
Got a promotion btw.
Hmm.. that means you pay for today's movie.
Damn you.
I paid the first installment of the car, did I tell you?
Hmm.. Your dad, didnt ask you to pay, did he?
No, but I thought I could pay half for him. That way it would be easier for him.
Hmm.. we are planning to buy a house too..
In mulund?
No re, its out of reach now. Maybe in Thane. Now that I make money too, my parents can afford it..
Man! We are paying installements, buying flats.. We are growing up!!!
Pointing to two college kids sitting at a table across the cafe.
Remember when we were like them?
Whats with those shoes and whats with the hairstyle these kids have nowadays?
Yeah.. and look at their jeans. One more of his size can fit into those!! And they think they look "cool"!
Hehehe.. weirdos..
Its 6:45.. Why do they always have to be this late..
Its evolutionary.. Its in the bible..
What the? The bible doesnt allow women to come late..
Arre it does! Even the first woman "Eve" came only after Adam got really bored.
Hehehe.. Your sense of humour has gone down the drain.
shut up dumbass..
Just then two pretty girls entered the cafe.
"Hello boys", one said.
"Are we late?", the other asked.
No babe.
"Lets leave, dont wanna miss the starting"
The guys paid the bill and started walking out when one of them overheard one of the college kid swearing at the other.
He looked back at the kids, the kid wearing a green nike shirt thrusted a 100 rupee note in the hands of the other kid. He smiled at them.
He held her hand and pulled her close to him. He whispered in her ear -
"You see those two guys sitting there. I think, they had a bet whether we had girlfriends or not. The guy in the green shirt lost."
"How can you be sure about the bet thing", she asked.
"Coz I have been there "
She looked at him amused. She looked back at the college kids and giggled. The four of them left.
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I tried to experiment with some stuff here. If you notice, there are around 6 characters in Scene 1 and 6 characters in Scene 2, two of them are common. So in all, there are like 10 characters. I have tried to make sense without naming even a single character.
Kindly let me know if this story makes sense of should I make it more understandable.
Editor in chief Arshat Chaudhary
Current Issues: ccd, coffee cafe day, mulund, nirmal lifestyle, nirmals, Thane
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Nupur said...
Hahaha!!!I was just laughing all the way on the post!!! It was too good!!! bTW, the story does make sense!! Too good!!
p.s: I thought its the guy who's always late for a date!!
totalliemeh said...
yup.tht made sense. it was interesting to read that,really.
Hey when did you buy them shoes?
Monday.
And you didnt tell me?
Tell you? what are we? girls?
now that was really funny..true too!!:P..
Bullshee said...
No, it works. You need the build up to the last line - " She looked back at the college kids and giggled. "
Any one with basic common sense and fourth grade gusthi skills can understand the rest. If they can't they're probably studying at an IIM :-)
Good one.
p.s - Totally pissing on IIMers this week.
iceprincess said...
:)
u sure did make sense.....
and yea...indeed..d "Adam and eve" barb!!!
maybe we just like to see d guy's eyes lighting up when we walk towards them,so we better be late...
Reema said...
Its a good read and the narration is simple and understandable.
Anonymous said...
It made complete sense..loved it...smooth and sweet! :)
Anonymous said...
it ws prefectly handeled ..
i like parallel writesa nd this was really good .. not just the execution but also the content ! liked it :)
Ashish Gourav said...
awsome awesome awesome awesome!!!!!
What an Idea....
we do swap our places in life!!!!
Life moves very fast
Harish said...
Of course the story makes sense..
Made for good reading. But seriously, do we change so much in just one year! :P
Thoorika said...
Nice experiment :) is it a true story?
HIREN aka lamda said...
Gud experiment dude..
u kept it so simple dat e1 widout names v could make out d characters....
& ha its a true life story..........
4 sure.,...
infact many ppl hv gone thru dis.........
Winnie the poohi said...
Its amazing!
Loved it!
Anonymous said...
it was fantastic..and each word made sense.. :) lovely intellectual sensible humor.. :)
mast! :D
Anya said...
mast creativity bro.. great work indeed.. come down and see my shazhal song.. you might want to join the classes soon..
and its good to see the quantum of your posts these days.. it has increased and it is bubbling with creative laughter.. good going arshat..
keep writing
god bless
www.chronicwriter.com
Anonymous said...
I loved this one..
Balaji said...
Hey man, Good one. I had tried doing the same thing on my last post....bring out a narrative without naming any of the characters. Having names usually makes life a lot easier, and coming up with a narrative like this can be very challenging, but I think you pulled this one off smoothly...great work!
Unknown said...
very nicely done...
i came across somewhat a similar thingie but on a serious note...
chk this out too
http://www.jennifersdreams.com/inspirations/cookies.html
Sumit said...
yup a lot can actually happen over a coffee. U can make ur readers laugh, sulk, jealous, introspect, retrospect, get deja vu and also to look down whether one is a peter england guy or a nike jhola guy just like all the six people in the story did.
Anyways great post as ususal from u
Anonymous said...
I thought there were only 4 characters. Easily, the gals were discounted... Hmm... Good creativity.. Keep it up. No, dont use names...
aroop said...
something tells me those aren't just characters.. one of them is you and I even know which one... hahahaha....
been working 2 years earn more than anyone i know of my age.. why's my girl still with a dork :D
Nikita said...
awesome writing dude!
Some writings seem very effortless, which makes them totally great. Yours is one of those :)
Arshat Chaudhary said...
@Nupur
Glad it made you laugh :)
Btw, I am a guy and I am never late for a date (ladies note)
@damsel in distress
hehehe... :P
@Bullshee
bechare IIMers, now what did they do this time..:P
@iceprincess
That Adam-Eve thingy is true.. arre saachi.. :P
That eyes lighting up theory does make sense :)
@reema
Thanks
@anon
Arent you sweet..
@pretty me
Glad you liked it..
@ashish
Thanks for the kind words mate!
@harish
heehehe.. hmm.. now that is up for some debate :)
@Thoorika
True story? hmm.. what do u think? ;)
@hiren
hmm.. thoorika, theres your answer :)
I think most of us go through this swaping of places..
@winnie the poohi
Thanks :)
@the pink orchid
Thanks mate.. :)
@chronicwriter
Well that increase in the number of posts is to spread the cheer :)
@soumya
Thanks mate :)
@balaji
Thanks.. will catch up the post on your blog
@vaibhav
yeah, i have heard that one.. its nice
@sumit
Wow! thats quite a compliment sumit. Thank you :)
@sam
Rule 1: never discount the ladies :P
@aroop
hehehehe...
I will tell you why you dont have a girl, you arent hot enuf for
aaj-kal ka girls :P
*evil grin*
@nikita
:)
Abhishek said...
very cool dude...actually iam in the phase where I can relate to both of the stories... 1.5. year into the job..and my college days dont seem that far away... kinda nice reading it....
Sugandha Srivastava said...
Great post! Great Blog! :-)
DPhatsez said...
course it works!
I was wondering why gals were always late for everything. It took your post to drill home the point that the Bible warned us of it in its very first chapter.
Some christian i am :)
Creative experiment! Keep 'em coming!
A Fineapple said...
its make sense..super cool story..